tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4792815515390696434.post8485126335246480720..comments2023-04-13T08:06:59.988-07:00Comments on To Live in a Rainbow: Beethoven and SpringKeliaMeganhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11943536028984842299noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4792815515390696434.post-55020918117242154822008-04-21T11:37:00.000-07:002008-04-21T11:37:00.000-07:00Thanks so much! I'm trying to think of a different...Thanks so much! I'm trying to think of a different last line...but not succeeding...KeliaMeganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943536028984842299noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4792815515390696434.post-4061547988237568132008-04-20T08:39:00.000-07:002008-04-20T08:39:00.000-07:00Your poems are getting steadily better with the pr...Your poems are getting steadily better with the practice! Both of these are excellent. You need a stronger last line (or maybe two to catch the meaning) on the first one. It is really excellent thought, well expressed. You need a finish with punch to match the rest of the poem. The second is full of the feeling of spring. I like it.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07023413530687513199noreply@blogger.com