tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4792815515390696434.post887405646281117546..comments2023-04-13T08:06:59.988-07:00Comments on To Live in a Rainbow: Many PoemsKeliaMeganhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11943536028984842299noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4792815515390696434.post-2930711307893255882009-03-02T05:27:00.000-08:002009-03-02T05:27:00.000-08:00Yeah, lengthening the second one might help... Tha...Yeah, lengthening the second one might help... Thank you!KeliaMeganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943536028984842299noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4792815515390696434.post-2195583321150702932009-03-01T04:55:00.000-08:002009-03-01T04:55:00.000-08:00You're poems are really nice, I especially lik...You're poems are really nice, I especially like the 1st and 3rd ones. The way the words roll of your tongue and the imagery it all creates is really nice. [I really like the imagery in the last one too!] <BR/><BR/>I can see in the second poem you have doubts. Perhaps if you told more of what that story is that could be told from that moment it would flow better? For me anyway it seems like it starts out with the story but ends short. It has a good basis and idea but perhaps with a bit more work you may like it more? Of course, that is up to you. <BR/><BR/>You have a lot of talent! :] Keep it up!!<BR/><BR/>Love ya girly!<BR/><BR/>Katie <3333Miss Katiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10847762707432110245noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4792815515390696434.post-25659591002459729392009-02-28T10:40:00.000-08:002009-02-28T10:40:00.000-08:00Thanks! :D Thanks for the advice also. I can see a...Thanks! :D Thanks for the advice also. I can see a few places where I could put a space.KeliaMeganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11943536028984842299noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4792815515390696434.post-48799645901267362822009-02-28T07:50:00.000-08:002009-02-28T07:50:00.000-08:00I really like these...the imagry is great, and the...I really like these...the imagry is great, and they flow naturally, especially the first and last. You are right to have doubts about the second. <BR/>But...You need some space in the poems. Each new line does not have to start right below the one before. If you would pause between lines when reading out loud, put an extra empty line in to indicate it. The reader has only how the poem looks on the page as clues to how it should be read.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07023413530687513199noreply@blogger.com