Poem

Here's a poem I just wrote.

I wish I could find a way to say
how confused this all makes me.
I wish confusion would
float away in the wind
like a kite
glinting in the sun
as it flies over ocean waves
as it's string is severed
by an invisible force
as it dips and soars
getting smaller as it goes
I turn away
the world's gone too
all is peaceful and white.


Originally I had the end

I turn away
before it disappears
the world's gone too
all is peaceful and white.

Which do you like better?
Kelia