Friday, February 20, 2009

Poem

Torn in three
I don't know what
to think or feel
Indecision
rules my world
The only constant:
none.
Not true.
Seas may rage
but a floor is always there
hold on to it
and try to breathe in
water.


Written last thursday (not yesterday) but wow it applies to today.
Kelia

3 comments:

writing_geek said...

So I had Anna read this poem (and I'm posting this on her computer which is why it say's I'm her) and she suggested changing the end. Does this work better?

Seas may rage
but ground is firm beneath me
hold on to it
and try to breathe in
water.

writing_geek said...

I like them both, you're poetry is amazing, Kelia. However, when I say it aloud I personally like the second one more - has to do with the way it flows off the tongue towards the end. Of course, this is *your* poem, so which ever one makes you happiest makes us happiest ;].

Honestly, though, the entire poem is amazing. I need to check here more often!!!

Love ya,

Katie ♥ ♥

KrazyK said...

Thanks so much! I agree, and I think the second one makes more sense too. :D <3